Tuesday, March 2, 2010

Revised This is me

I just got out of my night class where we workshopped this poem. I decided to use some of the suggestions. I think I like the revision better. Thoughts?

Do you wish to know me?
I am
Dancing, White trash,
A silver ring with an oval jade stone.

I am
Pride, Hometown pride.
A large bridge that touches the sky,
Trees, Blueberry fields.

I am
Running,
Wild under the summer sun.
Riding in the car,
Windows rolled down,
Music blaring,
Singing.

I am Stubborn.
I am Water, Beaches, And Deer,
And Frogs that sing you to sleep.
I am all of these things and more.
It’s nice to meet you.

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